In a perfect world, an ass-whooping would be at the expense of your enemy. Nicholas’s lips sponsored tonight’s foray into “Fists Gone Wild”. The beating was courtesy of his pal, Dex.
“I’m warning you, Nick. Knock it off,” Dex uttered.
“Or what? You know what they say about you?”
“I’ll knock your pearly whites down your throat.”
“You and what…”
Dex slammed his fist and connected with Nicholas’s face. Had Nicholas not gotten into the bottle of ambrosia, his reflexes would have been better. If he’d stayed away from the booze, he wouldn’t have made such a stupid crack to his friend.
Nicholas was also too drunk to realize he should’ve stayed down. He had been a glutton for punishment since he was a little boy. A scrapper, his mother called him. Others just called him a masochist.
“You motherfu…”
Another connection between Dex’s fist and Nicholas’s face was made.
“You’re just pissed about Noelle. I had nothing to do with that,” Dex explained.
“Enough!”
Nicholas recognized that voice. It was Skyler.
“Nick. Get the fuck out of here before I kick your ass.”
He tried to grab the bottle of ambrosia, but Skyler was faster and sober. Nicholas mumbled a few obscenities, headed for his new car, and took off to the bar.
As soon as he walked into the club that night, Nicholas realized he should have taken a table in the secluded VIP section. Instead, he sat at the bar. He wasn’t feeling very social. His body ached to either beat the shit out of someone, or have the shit beaten out of him, again. Through his ambrosia haze, he wondered about these feelings. They were happening more frequently, along with a sudden rash, which would sometimes cover his whole body. A new and odd reaction he suffered from. It first happened when the Almighty forbade him to see Noelle. His skin turned lobster red, like humans after a day in the sun.
The Almighty was the queen bitch in charge. She oversaw all of the angels in the particular hierarchy known as the Brotherhood of Light. Her other job description included watching over the humans and fucking with Nicholas. And the best way to get at Nicholas was to take away his rights as Noelle Spencer’s guardian. In addition to making his skin turn red, that decision made his blood boil.
Tuesday, June 16, 2009
Posted by Ella at 9:27 AM
Labels: Angels, demons, paranormal, writing
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10 comments:
NIIICE!!! I actually kinda feel sorry for Nick! Poor guy... doesn't get the girl and is getting his ass kicked. that's gotta hurt pride, ego, AND body! lol
loved it!!!
~Jen
I didn't know you'd posted a teaser!!!
I adore Nicholas. He's so complicated and dark and tortured.
Ah, I remember this. :)
You've done some work on Angel, I can tell! This is a nice piece, with good action, Bran. And Nicholas is, as always, lovely.
Too drunk to realize he should've stayed down. *nodnod* I've seen it before. Nick is a bad boy.
Definitely want to know more about Nicholas. I like the idea that he doesn't know if he wants to beat someone up, or get beaten.
Hee. Your second sentence made me laugh. I'm also getting the feeling that the rash and bodily sensations are a harbinger of big things to come. (Sorry, but first I've read your work.)
Minor point: When dialogue is sharply interrupted, it should be "You and what--". The ellipsis is for when speech trails off.
"I'll knock your pearly whites down your throat." I love a good fight scene! Great job, I can't wait to read more!
It's good! I like the action and the pacing!
One thing (don't hate me) "He tried to grab the bottle of ambrosia, but Skyler was faster and sober." This is a little awkward. Maybe something like "He tried to grab the bottle of ambrosia, but Skyler, still sober, was faster."
I'd love to hear more about Nicholas, he sounds like he has a lot of layers to him.
Great fight scene!
Loved this: "His body ached to either beat the shit out of someone, or have the shit beaten out of him, again." Totally want to read more.
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